Editorial Report Introduction

Looking back and review work you've revised will allow you effectively gauged how well your review process has been going. In the case of this project, it is vital to our revision process, as the majority of the time for this project has been dedicated to reviewing our rough and semi-revised drafts. Thankfully, this will result in an excellent product. What follows are my answers to audience questions regarding my most recent revision process regarding my introductory paragraph.

1. How did the content change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the content is being communicated more effectively in the re-edited version?
   - The content changed mainly in word choice and voice. In the first sentence, the voice was changed from passive to active voice, to start the essay off strong and say that the program is definitively problematic. Also, some other small things that will add to the reader experience are added, such as stating dates of production to say that the project is still ongoing, stating fighter craft instead of fighter to avoid confusion, and also stating from the beginning that there are 3 F-35's, to prevent confusion for the next section describing the F-35s. I believe all of these small things add up to the reader getting a more full experience when reading the introduction, and being able to gauge what they are reading about as they continue down the guide.
2. How did the form change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the form is presenting the content more effectively in the re-edited version?
   - My introductory paragraph did not change immensely in form. Commenting on the form would entail commenting on the sentence structure, which was changed around slightly to make way for the active voice in the first sentence. Otherwise, the form of my essay as a whole benefited from me using more detailed information in the beginning paragraph because it allows a potential reader a more accurate glimpse of my essay before having many of the details thrown at them.
   
   
   Rough Draft Section - It is easier to just copy and paste into my blog even though it destroys some of my formatting.  
   
   
   
   
   Why the F-35 is the Failure of the Joint Strike Fighter Program
   
   
   
   
   
   
   
    1"CF-1 Flight Test", Andy Wolf via wikimedia, 2/11/11, Public Domain

   A Navy F-35 conducts flight tests over Chesapeake Bay

   
   
   Widely publicized as the most expensive weapons program in history, the Joint Strike Fighter program has been a troubled government project from its inception. The F-35 fighter, the Joint Strike Programs fighter of choice has faced many issues from the beginning, ranging from multiple technical and performance issues to immense budget overruns.
   Background on Joint Strike Fighter Program
   The original task of the program was to save money. Designed to replace a multitude of planes, the F-35 Lightning II will fill three different roles, for the Air Force, Navy, and Marine Corp. As part of a major acquisition project, the F-35 will also be sold to eleven different allies of the U.S. to complement their own air contingents. Taking on so many roles, the aircraft would make one common platform for replacement parts and upkeep for three major branches of the military. This plan, to share up to 80% of parts across the three major platform would decrease the cost of maintenance and achieve affordability when building and upgrading the planes down the line.

   2”F-35 US Joint Strike Fighter Profile”, Zachary Cohen via CNN. A comparison of the F-35A, F-35B, and F-35C Final Draft Why the F-35 is the Failure of the Joint Strike Fighter Program Written by Alexander McCarthy 1"CF-1 Flight Test", Andy Wolf via wikimedia, 2/11/11, Public Domain A Navy F-35 conducts flight tests over Chesapeake Bay The Joint Strike Fighter program has been a problematic government project from its inception, and is now widely publicized as the most expensive weapons program in history. All three versions of the Lockheed Martin F-35 Lightening II fighter, the Joint Strike Program’s fighters of choice, have faced many issues from the inception of the program in the late 1990s, ranging from multiple technical and performance issues to immense budget overruns discovered as the program began production in the late 2000s. Background on Joint Strike Fighter Program 2”F-35 US Joint Strike Fighter Profile”, Zachary Cohen via CNN. A comparison of the F-35A, F-35B, and F-35C The original task of the program was to save money by designing an aircraft to replace a multitude of planes. The F-35 Lightning II is designed to fill three different roles: for the Air Force, Navy, and Marine Corp. As part of a major acquisition project, the F-35 will also be sold to eleven different allies of the U.S. to complement their own air contingents. Taking on so many roles, the aircraft would make one common platform for replacement parts and upkeep for three major branches of the military. This plan, to share up to 80% of parts across the three major platforms would decrease the cost of maintenance and achieve affordability when building and upgrading the planes down the line.